That sounds pretty ridiculous DX. I've read WAW before, and I must say the grammar and the spelling is pretty subpar, no offense to you. I;m just trying to help you, so I'll say this, because reading bad grammar is pretty tough for me when it's being drilled into my head with double period English classes. First, the thing with then vs than. Then is an adverb shows a time and place, while than is a conjunction, a linking word. In your BTB, you use "and than, and than" it sounds like Dude where's my car, so use "then". And run on sentences are everywhere in any BTB, so avoid those too. I feel like a prick and a teacher now, but I'm just venting out a little frustration.