Cast Them In Hell | Brian Zewbowski - Roleplay Feedback
- not the biggest fan of the flash forwards into time, on a creative writing side it is interesting - but in terms of been a roleplay for a wrestling character I do find it confused. It is hard to criticize, because the writing is very good and it helps build the character - but I've always struggled with flash forwards with e-fed characters.
- The scene with Harvey was interesting, a tad confusing at time but I could see there is an intent of helping create the character in a certain way. I do like that there is a clear split personality going on, I've seen people try and fail to use dual personalities, but I do actually read it like the same person is very much two different characters.
- The scene with Sarah in many ways, I think was the most important of the four scene in the roleplay. This was where I felt there was the really push promo - and where the best direction came from. On a personal level, I feel that if we had a lot more time with Sarah and Brian, and more of a balance with the backstory stuff you could make people literally shit themselves when they are booked to face you.
- The traditional promo was solid. When I imagine the cutting between Brian and Humanity, I get the supernatural vibes that you would get in the 90s in the WWF and WCW. And I like what you are doing. I do enjoy you are adding a lot of high fantasy into this character, and as much as its not always my thing I do know that some people will love what you are doing.
I am a big fan of where you are taking Brian - so keep it up.
i looked and it seemed so damn long.
