RP Feedback

[Slim]

I know for me... its just a lack of time. I spend a lotta time out here and there so ya know... it happens when it does. But I will say... to "bump" a thread that is stickied... that isn't necessary But ummmm yeah... I can get to critiquing and ... feedback and the such at some random time.

 

[Doink]

Any feedback for Michael Black?

 

[John McHenry]

Any feedback for Michael Black?

I'll get on it

Thats something though people requesting feedback should say who their character is if it's not obvious so guys don't have to track it down.

 

[Tapout]

Okay, so first RP for Ryan Corey is up. So, check it out, and give feedback if you have the time/want to. I'll try my best to give some feedback to other people.

 

[Andrew]

Tapout - Loved your RP, I even clicked Like.

It's really good, you've shown your cockiness and spoke about your opponents. Would have loved to see more but from what I saw, it's great.

 

[The Wrestling Addict]

You don't have to sugarcoat your feedback in this thread.

 

[John McHenry]

No

1.) Pondering in description- Unless you're in the character's mind saying what he's thinking, pointing out that somebody might be religious if they have lot of paraphernalia in the house isn't really necessary. I do like how you take time to describe color and set the tone, but other things like "whose face we're watching at the moment"--well, yeah, you're describing it or else we wouldn't be watching.

This is a critque of Derrick and Ellis

Derrick I agree with what Diablo said.

Personally I'm not a fan of mentioning the camera unless your Interacting with the cameraman or doing an interview dunno why just my own pet peeve. Both your guys RP's were good but neither of them really did much for me Derrick Tyler Angel and being The Chosen One with that specific gimmick I just thought to myself wow how original.

Ellis your RP in my mind was just too similar to Derricks change the name of the characters and it's almost a continuation in my mind. I think this may have just been two characters too similar in the same match for me to critique you guys properly.

 

[John McHenry]

Deuce yours is a bit short sometimes that can work sometimes it can't but for a debut it should be a tad longer. I don't get a sense or your guys character in the first paragraph he kinda seemed like a heel. Then the fans were chanting for him and in the second paragraph he seemed to be a face. All he really did was say hey I'm gonna beat all these guys and win. I mean for the most part thats usually said at some point in a promo but it's usually not all thats there.


Everyone
Seems apparent most of you are used to TT feds I've never been in a TT fed always RP types. Youve all grown accustomed to using pictures in your rp's. Now I'm not sure if Bully and Diablo have made it a rule but typically you don't use pics in promos one of the ideas of an RP Efed is to have your words create the visual.

 

[Slim]

Well for quite a few it does seem like a first time endeavor so can't be too hard on them. Just have to give them time. Trial and error is the best way to make it through this. They'll get the hang of it. Besides its just the debut RP so it isn't gonna be perfect.

 

[The Wrestling Addict]

I frown upon pictures if they are overused. Some people can do them right, though. For instance, Beach has always done a good job with them since I've known him. Pictures aren't a good idea in my opinion because in roleplaying style, you should be creative and explain the setting and what is taking place.

 

[Slim]

Yeah definitely a place for everything. Like in the last year I've used one picture but it was needed to describe better to create that visual. I might use it here so I'm not describing it But yeah pictures in RP is an absolute rarity. And should be that way. Avoid at all costs.

 

[Kiffy Lube]

Yeah, I just have a simple banner that I make with my limited Photoshop skills.

 

[Vivido]

Hmmm may sign up for this is I end up sticking around at this forum. Been a good 3 or 4 years since I've done any role playing.

 

[Slim]

Sounds like all you need is a little encouragement... ummmmmm... we'll give you peanut butter crackers if you join. Unless you're allergic to peanuts or... butter.... then you get crackers if you join

 

[Derrick]

Or if you don't like crackers, I'll buy you a Snickers bar! That'll do the job!