WCW Rules' Review of Spiralshock's CTW Aftershock
I promised you a review, and so, here I go. Mind you, I'm rather new to this thread, though I see so much potential in it. Pardon if I may seem ignorant to some of your feuds and such.
Opening promo; pretty good. I think you did a solid job of announcing forthcoming matches and so forth. Aries/Low Ki and Homicide/McGuiness should be great matches. The Trophy looks okay, from where I am. Mr. Chaos has some personality, which I like, and the promo really picked up when Chris Hero appeared and took the mic. I like his character, and I think him as Champion is definitely a good thing; I wouldn't want to see him lose to Super Dragon, TBH. Hero's entertaining, and he can be a hot commodity if you use him effectively. I did like his comments towards the crowd, and I liked Mr. Chaos' rebuttal. The standard tag team match is made, and although it's a typical way of driving a feud, sometimes it's necessary, and it can be fun. Overall, I liked the promo; from my first impressions, you are definitely good.
I'm not familiar with Sabian or Mike Quakenbush, so bare with me. I skimmed through, and found a nice balance of swift action and impact. I did find some noticable grammar and structure mistakes in your writing, such as lack of antecedents (him, his, and other useful substitutes for pronouns) and overuse of "and," which kinda hindered the overall effectiveness of the match. Flow's kinda meh, so I'd work on that. endin in dirty fashion, Mike wins because of Chuck Taylor. I'm guessing Chuck and Sabian are embroiled in some feud? Ah... I see, payback. Quick promo from Chucky, him detailing everything up until this point. Who's the Heel and who's the Face? In any case, I'd like to see where this goes.
Hehe, kinda funny here; like I said prior, I like Hero's character. Very quick encounter, and I would've liked more, but it did get the job done, and quite well, if I do say so myself. One thing; "Back on Aftershock and Chris Hero is trying desperately to find a partner." There's no use for the and, merely use a comma after Aftershock.
Again, not really familiar with the guys in your matches other than Delirious and Steenerico here. Because of my unfamiliarity, I seem disconnected from some of the matches, so I'm just gonna comment on the ending, if you don't mind. I think I touched on grammar earlier on, so there's no need to do so here. Generico was pinned; surprised the Champions suffered the loss, but I guess it adds fuel to the fire.
Nice PPV ad; Chaos Cup should be good, especially considering some of the matches announced. Very cool; it's a 2 day event? Interesting. Oh, here comes Hero again. The guy's gold, IMO. Hehe, BJ told him off. Character wise, I can see why hero is struggling to find a partner; he's so... unlikable in a kayfabe sense. I hope he finds a partner soon, and TBH, I'm not sure who it'll be.
Homi! Good promo here, man. Homicide vented his frustrations and it looks like he wants Pondo. I liked the hero/villain illusion going here, though it's been done before. I think Pondo will accept and retain, due to some interference from Nigel and Aries. Let's see if I'm right. I knew Pondo would go through with it. I'm guessing this is a Hardcore Match? Cool. The match begins in a rough fashion, and I like how it just degenerates into pure carnage. The use of certain weapons, like the barbed wire bat, seemed sensible and moved the match along. I didn't really expect Homicide to gain the win here; this match was merely used for storyline purposes and did a solid job. Corporal Robinson making an appearance instead of Aries and Nigel did surprise me, though. The after math was just a clusterfuck of guys brawling; very entertaining. Aha, there's Nigel and Aries. I'd love a Tag Team Match b/w Low Ki, Corino, Danielson, and Homicide versus Aries, Nigel, Ian, and Pondo. It'd be good.
Hehe, more of Chris Hero. Though I'm loving his character, some overkill here with his domineering presence in the program. Of course, he's the Champ, so I'd expect some exposure for him regardless. Looks like he's found an ally, and on the phone too? The suspense is surely building, and I think you've done an adequate job of keeping me ill informed as to whom the partner is.
Quick promo from Corino, Danielson, Low Ki, and Homicide; it got the job done in advancing this chapter of the storyline, and I hope it goes where I want it to go. Looks like they're going to call in for help AND single one of their enemies out. Sounds good to me.
It's ME Time, baby! The team of Super Dragon and Jerry Lynn versus... Chris Hero and Claudio Castagnoli! I've seen some of Claudio's work before. The beginning of the match definitely set the tone for the rest of the match, which proved to be an worthwhile Main Event. I liked the fact you kept Dragon and Hero away from eachother 'till the end. Chris Hero rolling up Super Dragon makes me suspicious of what's to come; perhaps Dragon MIGHT take the Championship? Who knows; I hope not, though. Here we go, Mr. Chaos. Claudio is added to the cup, and Hero's title match is a Falls Count Anywhere match! Awesome, should be good in that sort of match type.
Overall, very entertaining. Hero made this show, TBH. I'm 'lovin his character, and his feuding against Super Dragon makes for good writing. Highlights include the Homicide/Pondo match, Hero's promos, and MOTN goes to the ME, for sure. Your promos are short, but they do get the job done. A little more detail and they'd be even greater. Your matches are good, content wise, but you need to improve on your writing a little bit to make 'em more effective. Solid job, man.
