Ok.
First off I just want to say that it was good for what was I guess, your first outing. Truly.
That being said, you know I'm not just going to get on your nuts like most others and tell you that it was awesome, because it wasn't. Now I'm not saying this to be a dick, if I thought there was no potential in the show, I wouldn't bother posting at all.
On with the show.
#1. Stop swearing. I am an afficionado of curse words too, but it really detracts from the show when you do curse.
#2. Uhhhh, Ummmm. SP said it. Stop it. Script your show if you have to, and learn it like you learn a speech.
#3. Speaking of speaking. You're not monotonic in your speech, but your voice I found, rarely rose or fell. Learning the show like you do a speech will help you in adding in proper voice inflection.
And one last thing. This one just about one section in the show in particular.
The tournament bit.
Love tournaments. Here's the thing. I don't know how long that segment was, because I couldn't listen to it all the way through. It was great in your column, but just listening to it for, I guess I listened about 10 minutes, was really boring. But that also was a little due to #3 above.
If you want to do something like that, split it up into shows. Talk about the first round in one show and so on.
But I'd just like to close out this note by saying it was decent, it just needs a bit of polishing.
First off I just want to say that it was good for what was I guess, your first outing. Truly.
That being said, you know I'm not just going to get on your nuts like most others and tell you that it was awesome, because it wasn't. Now I'm not saying this to be a dick, if I thought there was no potential in the show, I wouldn't bother posting at all.
On with the show.
#1. Stop swearing. I am an afficionado of curse words too, but it really detracts from the show when you do curse.
#2. Uhhhh, Ummmm. SP said it. Stop it. Script your show if you have to, and learn it like you learn a speech.
#3. Speaking of speaking. You're not monotonic in your speech, but your voice I found, rarely rose or fell. Learning the show like you do a speech will help you in adding in proper voice inflection.
And one last thing. This one just about one section in the show in particular.
The tournament bit.
Love tournaments. Here's the thing. I don't know how long that segment was, because I couldn't listen to it all the way through. It was great in your column, but just listening to it for, I guess I listened about 10 minutes, was really boring. But that also was a little due to #3 above.
If you want to do something like that, split it up into shows. Talk about the first round in one show and so on.
But I'd just like to close out this note by saying it was decent, it just needs a bit of polishing.