In case anybody wants to give me any tips, suggestions, kudos or whatever for my first "official" roleplay in the dark match of Triple A Vs. The Hayes Brothers Vs. David Baptie & Josh Jones. It's always appreciated. Rep + in return as well for anyone who cares. lol.
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I really enjoyed your rp, very well written and create characters. I honestly couldn't tell you how to make it better, and idk if i will be able to write a good reply although i know only one/best rp is the only one that will count im use to rping several times to a single match, if i reply expecting before thursday night.
It was great, man. It was written real well, almost made me feel like I was reading a book or something. You're probably one of the best pure writers here, so I'm definitely glad you're on the staff and will be writing matches.
If THAT was your first roleplay, you're only gonna get better, and you're already good. Keep it up.
If THAT was your first roleplay, you're only gonna get better, and you're already good. Keep it up.
I've learned alot from alot of great efedders over the past 4 years that I've been doing this. I'm doing something rather different this time around by making a trio of characters that you can actually imagine being normal everyday people. They have lives and problems and concerns and joys and triumphs. Hopefully they'll eventually grow a fanbase of people who tune in every week to see what's going to happen with Triple A next. lol.
Yeah man, that's what I was thinking when I was reading it. Your characters seem like normal people, with normal dialogue. The whole 'heel' thing and being mean to everyone and beating random people up is played out imo. I like the humor in your RP, too. Looking forward to reading more.
You're description of the setting was simply fantastic. I was able to easily visualize the restaurant, and the dialogue and action of the story flowed very well. I got a clear sense of who each character was, and it was a very well written RP. They say that excellence is in the details, and the details are where you nailed it. Great job!
I started out hating details and description. It's still kinda a pain in the ass. But my method is that I type out all the planned Dialogue first, then I fill in the blanks that feel appropriate with descriptions that help move the scene along. Because if you all you have is dialogue then it just feels like your characters are sitting/standing in one place the entire time while you just stare at a huge block of dialogue in a colored font. No fun. lol.
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Maybe we should have a roleplay feedback thread. So before someone post their RP in the RP board, they can post it here and get suggestions and feedback if they want to
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That's not a bad idea, but it would take up alot of space.
However, you could post a small portion of your roleplays to give everybody the idea of what your doing instead of taking up the entire thread with the entire roleplay.
JMay187
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However, you could post a small portion of your roleplays to give everybody the idea of what your doing instead of taking up the entire thread with the entire roleplay.
JMay187
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Or maybe, in each roleplay thread already created, people could come and leave some feedback in there
Yeah, on other forums I was a part of, we just left feedback in the actual treads of the Rp's that were already written. That also gave way to more individualized feedback rather than creating a single thread for it or otherwise.