General Chit-Chat Thread - No Spoilers

[Rosie]

Also @Princess Rosé once again sorry abt the pronoun error. Completely unintentional on my behalf, just didn't spell check after myself

No problem. I figured it was a fuck up by accident.

 

[TOP GUY TIME]

I really do appreciate the feedback. Never quite worked out writing dialogue in a general scope so i'm always being better today than yesterday

 

[Rosie]

I really do appreciate the feedback. Never quite worked out writing dialogue in a general scope so i'm always being better today than yesterday

Besides, I've learned quite a bit in comparison to when I started in 2015.

 

[Rosie]

And another small thing is, on a second read, your promo ended a touch abruptly. Like I think a promo when it ends sort of comes to a resolution, or ends with a bang. I did like the part of you wanting to show Cyrus was right in trusting you back in Brand Warfare, but I often end with something around what the character does as the scene fades, or something to end on a note.

 

[TOP GUY TIME]

Yewh

 

[Rosie]

Like say there if you showed Sawyer's determination, that desire to get into the thick of it, and had him like, you set the scene of where he is then. Say he's in his living room. Have him ending with that line, yelling "I will SHOW that Cyrus Truth was right in believing me back then, and everyone can believe in me NOW!" Then him quickly getting up from his couch and storming off. THAT is how you add that extra bit of sizzle at the end.

 

[Kyle Gage]

 

[Chris]

@Ben IS HERE????

 

[Chris]

Well I guess not technically in this room anymore

 

[Kyle Gage]

did he just ghost us

 

[Canadian Dragon]

 

[TOP GUY TIME]

@Ben IS HERE????

He needed them CJ Perry pics

 

[Canadian Dragon]

four twentyyyyyyyy

 

[Hoss]

four twentyyyyyyyy

I'm hitting the light bulb as we speak

 

[Kyle Gage]

pass