1st one:
The background looks awkward. It doesn't really suit the piece, and looks like a torn effect and a bit choppy. Possibly what you were going for, but it doesn't look good. Text isn't well positioned and is also quite choppy. Needs to be a better font and stand out more.
2nd one:
As I told you on MSN, this looks pretty decent. Like the use of the C4D, as well as the positioning and managing not to get too much on her face. As I said, I'm a sucker for clipping masks on text, and the part you have used for the text looks good and flows real well. Could be a bit bigger, but it doesn't matter
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